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Amish Preserves?

I am sure ther was an inside joke on the Amush Preserves but I'm not getting it. My parents went Mennonite for about 5 years growing up, and our neighbors were Amish so I know a little of what I am talking about. The old lady was using Dutch sign language to tell you to go to Intercourse Pa. (Any non revisionist historian can explain that joke to you) On to true help with your movie.

1. The sound machine, get rid of it, it puts you in the wrong mindset for this flick.

2. As stated before that kind of hair would be flpping in the wind. She would have it in a braided pony tail for a real ride as the wind would whip it in her face the entire ride if she didn't.

3. In a video the wheels appear to move the wrong direction. (reverse) In animation it's standard to use the correct motion, you have a mix of media it's up to you to decide which way to go with that.

4. front tire is too big

5. people are off scale (too big)

6. no one's feet are on their pegs, even if his bike has forward controls his feet will be up higher, and the way her feet are they will be stubbs by the time they get there.

7. Remove the non scene shots, as much as an inside joke the cow sink and Village People are it takes away from the tone of the flick.

8. in most of the states that they went through not wearing a helmet will get them arrested and the nike impounded. If they wear full face put them in a shorty for the flick so you can see the faces but always promote safe riding.

9. i like the et reference but they should come up from the botom not down from the top

10. Keep them on the ground, you have them flying through the air alot even on water once. netley creek would fit better if you just saw the torsoes and the bike was cutt out of the scene.

11. When a bike slams on the brakes that way one of two things happen. The rear locks up and you skid to a stop fish tailing until you slow enough to get back in control (or you release the rear brake and reapply) or your rear end goes up in the air and you do a stoppie. My first bike didn't have rear brakes so i did those a lot, they can be fun when you get the hang of them.

12. I know you already got some flak for the pr0n but my issue would be if this if for a biker the drawn on undies are unneeded, At least around here. Boobs are everywhere at the rallies if you want a biker to notice you got to do the full monty.

13. this will be my last point, the size ratio of the bike doesnt need to change on the bridge. not unless they mutate on the way across. The size difference is too little to fit the way you did it.

I look forward to getting your feedback on my feedback. I honestly liked the thing, I'm a little biased to biker flicks, and would honestly like to see more biker stuff, but I will show ways I think will improve just about everything, not that i'm right all the time, but you would be surprised at my batting average.

wooliesock responds:

holy crap. i just wrote a really long responce to your feedback, and the damn thing ate my post! i am not going to sit here and type that whole mess again, so how bout i just email you later with a more thorough reply. :-)
(i can't believe it ate it) :-(

is philosophy, is attempt, are mediocre

Try using a diff background track, longer track, perhaps on the Enya route, or Yanni, best I can think of is Kitaro, like his real long japanese drum solo, Blue Man Group would fit this real well too.

Work on the rythm a little too, the pause in the random loop is a little distracting, with a slightly slower pace and even rythm with a different background track you would have the beginnings of a marketable meditation peice.

Also I love the realistic clouds in the background, but mine went pixelized as soon as the animation started, not sure if it was supposed to. Also the loop on the clouds would be cooler if it was continuous, or like a 3 minute loop so you didn't notice the constant change.

Like I said though, this is a marketable design. I know of several Zen Buddist that have tapes with mantras very similar. You get the design down and you have a cash opportunity here

rootdown responds:

thank you. this is what i call a review. ill try out your tips.

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